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Please Criticize My Landing Page – Call Conversions
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I don’t mind it! Is the phone number clickable? Is the full address listed on the page?
Some minor mistakes:
* “Precise contact hand wash” isn’t following your capitalisation rules.
* “Precise contact hand wash” and “Our Impeccable Paint Sealant” both have periods at the end of their sentences (inconsistent). -
You can’t really see your work when it’s three photos alligned like that. You have to zoom in to see how big of a difference it is.
I’m being nit picky but I’m not a huge fan of the color.
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I would be more aggressive . Why should they go with you ? What’s the unique value here. Also what is that discounted from. 199 means nothing without context
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What’s the main benefit/offer? That should be bold and big as your headline (eg. Full deep cleaning in 20 minutes) – unless your customers know what the November package is, it doesn’t really communicate much. Id also show and put a strike through the OG price to communicate how much of a discount they are getting
For the pics, id just use two pics or maybe even one to get the msg across. Three pics is too much. And id put little labels like before and after, maybe putting before in red, and after in green
Put the CTA (phone number) a bit further down. People wont call it unless they understand the offer
Finally, id rework the design. Its ok but idk why it doesnt stand out. Id look at other designs and model those
If you can i’d also put a pic at the bottom of your team to give a more human element, and maybe link to your 5 star yelp page for trust
Good luck
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You have 5 seconds to capture a customer’s attention. Right now, your updated landing page says “experience why we’re 5 stars”
But that’s bragging, and not telling me why I should hire you?
Something like “Make your car look like new” or something like that to hook the user as your headline.
Then you can brag. Then once you capture that user’s attention, you can talk about the sell.
You might also test starting off with your current sale, then talking about why the customer should use you, then brag about the 5 stars.
Think about what is important from a customer’s point of view. When you’re looking for service, what’s the most important thing for you?
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